Haiku – Sky Fire 6 (Re-Write)

Sunlight cascading,

fading, into nighttime’s grasp

Evening sky bleeds

After publishing this earlier today I realized two things, the last line had six syllables in it (evening is three not two) and I also wasn’t a big fan of the way I closed the original – Evening sky turns red.

I went ahead and made the changes and then published it the way I think it should have gone out, originally.  Us poets, so neurotic, we have to get it right.

Thank you for reading.  You are now free to move about the blog.

Here is the original Part 6: https://awrenfro.com/2013/02/25/haiku-sky-fire-6/

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